Feedback from this pitch
1 - I like how your idea links with your research for example making it animated 2 - I would like to see a little drawing to see how this could look like 3 - what will you be animating this on (what software) (I will be using Microsoft PowerPoint or Ibis PaintX for the characters and FlipaClip for animated backgrounds)
I really like the secondary research you did and I think it DOES make sense to have the business man in a dark colour so the kids see him as more serious. I wonder if you could start the animation with the man actually IN the book, then he could come put of it into the "real" world? How long will this take to animate? Will you be able to complete it before the deadline?
What I like: I really like how you have really spoken about how your video is going to appeal to the younger audience What could be improved: Your inspiration is really detailed but could you put it at the start because it doesn't really make sense to take about your research and then your inspiration. Question: What made you want to put the lyrics on the screen like in Spiderman Into the Spider-verse. (I liked the style and the implementation of the lyrics for the song in the movie as if it was a part of the movie instead of just at the bottom of the screen)
1 I liked how you explained the lyrics and what you want to add for each section, also the secondary research on primary and secondary research. 2 Maybe you could show us pictures of the animations or still frames so we could get an idea (I made this change in my next pitch) 3 why did you chose to animate this music video? (My research suggested that children enjoy animations more that as live.)
1) I can really tell you have visualised what your animation will look like and I want to see the process behind the MV 2) I like how you talked about your inspiration for your MV 3) Will you animation look like the duck video? (Yes, almost exactly like it) 4) The research made sense as to why it relates to your mv
* I really like the idea of drawing the characters and the inspiration you got the idea from sets a great example for the kids aged 5-9 in your audience. * I would change the idea of putting the lyrics on screen, because it might affect the music video itself due to the lack of budget for top editing tools and softwares. * Don’t tell me you are somehow going to put the lyrics on screen, instead tell me what you will do to put the lyrics on there.
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